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Monday, 29 June 2015

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BURMA TRAIL MOMENT IN TIME I saw teachers scarring children as they thought it was wild chimps. I heard charming people screaming from teachers as they raised from the dead. I felt hands pulling on the tightrope and also people behind me as they touched my body. I wondered if I was going to step in a brown stained cow poo.

2 comments:

  1. Slick writing M'kuz just edit it a bit and use better punctuation and put in more adjectives but other then that Nice work!....

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  2. Wow Tre.You could use more wow words to enhance your writing.But what a good short piece.Keep it up!!!

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