BURMA TRAIL MOMENT IN TIME
I saw teachers scarring children as they thought it was wild chimps.
I heard charming people screaming from teachers as they raised from the dead.
I felt hands pulling on the tightrope and also people behind me as they touched my body.
I wondered if I was going to step in a brown stained cow poo.
Slick writing M'kuz just edit it a bit and use better punctuation and put in more adjectives but other then that Nice work!....
ReplyDeleteWow Tre.You could use more wow words to enhance your writing.But what a good short piece.Keep it up!!!
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